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Every country has poor people and every country 5tghas different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for poverty? What can we do to help the poor? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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On the one hand, The work atmosphere will be more relaxed. Since people know their own family, they feel more comfortable at work.
Such
 comfort can lead to less pressure and tension on individuals, leading to having
work
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 environment as calm as possible.
In addition
, family member businesses have more success rate. People from the same family, trust each
others
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.
This
 reliance can strengthen unity among colleagues leading to functioning more focused to reach the best efficiency of the company. Taking IKEA as an example of a
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 company, all the key-role managers are relatives.
On the other hand
, Family businesses can result in mediocre performance. There are positions that tend to be given to relatives who are not competent enough.
In other words
, skills are replaced by relations.
Therefore
,
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 performance will be weakened.
Furthermore
, emotional decisions can replace professional ones. Due to the fact that people have relations with each other, they may be influenced by their emotions when it comes to job-related interactions.
For instance
, a husband may not dare to oppose his wife in making decisions in
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,
although
 she is wrong.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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