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Without capital punishment(the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Violence
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 has been an integral part of human history. If studied in detail, our history reflects the predilection that humans have toward
violence
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. Despite there being laws and preachings about non-
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violence violence
, we still see a plethora of violent activities around us. To curb them, governments and law agencies enforce certain
punishments
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. One of the most prominent
punishments
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 is capital
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 presented here implies that without capital
punishment
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, crimes of
violence
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 will increase. But I tend to disagree with that opinion. The reason for my disagreement lies in the psychology of
criminals
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. Most of the
criminals
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 involved in heinous and violent are mentally disturbed or motivated by some very strong influences.
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criminals
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 of the famous 9/11 attacks in New York or the 26/11 attacks in Mumbai were not worried about their own lives. Their sole motive was to instil fear and spread their propaganda.
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, capital
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, in no way alleviates the damage caused by violent activities.
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, for giving capital
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, many court proceedings need to be held and the cost of sustaining
criminals
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 till the
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 date
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 proves to be a burden. Rather than giving capital
punishment
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, I believe that making the
criminals
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 work as labours in labour camps is more beneficial. In that way, the cost of labour can be decreased and will
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 help in repairing the properties that they have damaged. Depending upon the seriousness of
crime
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,
criminals
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 of most serious crimes can be used for science experiments, for which, until now, innocent animals are being sacrificed. In
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 manner, they can contribute to the scientific development of the country. Concluding my argument, as already reflected in the above paragraphs, I do not believe that capital
punishments
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 are really efficient at controlling
violence
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, nor are they the best
punishments
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.
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