Topic 21: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

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Living conditions are very important for
overall
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the overall
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growth of
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children
childrens
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.While some people prefer to raise their children in suburban areas.
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,I believe that growing a
child
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in larger cities have major benefits,
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as access to better
education
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and
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sport
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facillities
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facilities
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, The urban areas
provides
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the best in class
education
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infrastructure compared with
countryside
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the countryside
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.It not only allows them access to all the modern
education
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facilities
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as modern teaching methods but
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guidance by expert teachers.
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, they have
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to choose from different private coaching institutions and modern libraries.
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,
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a student
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student
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students
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studying in
metro
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a metro
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city
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cities
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like Mumbai, can attend
world known
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school
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schools
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and utilise the resources of the same for overall growth.
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, The cities will have better
facilties
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facilities
for
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sport
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activities. If
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child
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a child
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is interested to pursue
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sport
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a sport
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as
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a
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career
then
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parents can easily find and
enroll
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them in
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a sport
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sport
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academy. If they are deprived of these
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facilities
in
country side
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then
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child
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have
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to curb their dreams and it might force
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child
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a child
the child
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to pursue
dream
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a dream
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which he is not passionate about. In turn, which will affect their overall growth and performance in academics. In conclusion, I believe it is wise to grow the
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children
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childrens
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children
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in urban cities because of the better
education
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envirnoment
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environment
and overall access to
sport
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faciltilies
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facilities
.
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