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Without capital punishment ( the death penalty ) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?

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the judicial authorities of the country. Some people believe that there
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 is not the only solution to decrease
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 is essential to apply discipline and control for certain types of
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. I strongly believe that
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 is necessary to control brutality in
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 for some type of
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. To start with, one group of individuals believe that
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violence. We have seen that violence in society is increasing rapidly. If these types of
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 are not executed, there will be the possibility that these types of illegal acts increase.
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 rape and murder. And
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100 times before
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 that his or her
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 his or her own life.
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 is not a solution to diminish serious
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. As we can see the illegal activities are still increasing after implementing
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. They believe that every human being needs a
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 like
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 should be sent to the mine for working hard. These
type
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 of punishment are beneficial for
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society. Eventually,
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 culprit realises mistakes and want to start a new beginning. To summarize,
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 convincing, each has its own strong point to debate. Yet, I strongly agree that
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supreme for
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 like rape and murder which will help to reduce viciousness in the society
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