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Nowadays, people can easily find and share information online. What problems can this cause and what are solutions ?

#people #information
To begin
with
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 people can find
information
 updated
on
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apply
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online. People can get the
information
 handy rather than visiting the place.
Information
of
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about
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each
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apply
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and everything in the world can be found online by sitting at one place,through online children can
also
 study various activities which help them to get more ideas to do something
by
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 their own.
For instance
, if a family wants to go on a tour they can get the
information
 of that place and package online and book it. If they
donot
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do not
don't
 have any
information
 which they are
lokking
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looking
 for so that they can contact them through the phone which is available under the contact section of their website. I think that online
doesnt
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doesn't
 cause any problems rather than issuing any payment on the wrong website that may cause
theft
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 to the
person
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personal
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 account. Except
this
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,this
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 the online
information
 is very useful in
this
 generation.
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