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Technology has changed the way people communicatr today. Some people belive this is making our relationship stronger while others believe it is harming them. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Advancements in technology in the past decade have been dramatic. Many people argue these vast changes lead to a decrease in human contact. Others think it has helped in making our relationships stronger. In
this
 essay, I will examine both views and state my onlook on
this
 problem.
First
 and foremost, every household in
this
 era has a smartphone. Applications like Whatsapp, Viber and WeChat have made communication easier than ever before.
This
 way families and friends can not only talk to each other instantaneously but
also
 virtually see them.
Moreover
, wireless gadgets like phones are portable and have location trackers which means, people are always accessible.
This
 feature is especially crucial in emergency situations.
For instance
, by dialling 999 the police can immediately track you down and be at hand to help.
On the other hand
, these robotic devices are thought to be the number one reason for the surge in depression and loneliness. "Let's sit down and have a cup of tea", is a saying we hear very seldom these days unlike in the past many crave the basic human touch or just a warm hug. Smartphones, laptops are tablets have produced a generation that at a glance might look together but deep inside are a million miles apart. To conclude, I believe technology has strengthened relationships by providing a medium for portable and accessible communication.
However
, the negative impacts these devices have on peoples mental health is disheartening. As we all know nothing in
this
 world is good if taken in excessive.
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