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• An increasing trend nowadays is for young adults to play computer games. some people say this is negative development . Discuss and give your opinion.

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In
this
 technological era, advanced gadgets attract younger minds.many argued that excessive use of computer
games
 obtain a detrimental effect on youngsters.I agree with
this
 statement because the technology has many drawbacks, which
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 will explain that
further
 in the paragraph and state my opinion. Fi ,and playing
games
 , which might affect their career and health as well. Playing video
games
 impacted their health in many ways like it will affect their mental well-being ,physical illness. sometimes it causes big issues like obesity, heart problem.
secondly
 , the access usage of the
games
 will generate many arduous in education.They become less productive in their studies and use the grip in subjects.
For instance
 , according to one survey , 75% of students spending more than 10 hours in video
games
. which led to them being addicted to it.
secondly
, children have good grasping power than adults . They can easily learn the new technology.
That is
 why they get addicted soon as well. there are more chances of losing fitness. It directly impacted health , sitting in one place for more than 5,6 hours , causes our body.
In addition
 , youngsters getting difficulties in their work or job.
For example
 , In Japan 80% of students ,who below the 25 age suffering from eyesight problems and obesity. In conclusion , technology has some advantages but there are
also
 negative effects , which may lead to the biggest problem in the very early stage of life.I would like to recommend that , youngsters should play video
games
 but only for a limited short of a time period.
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