People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society How can we create an ideal society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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it has been said that people always fail in building a perfect

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believe that several solutions can be practice to create an ideal community. What is an ideal

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? there are some aspects

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, there is no gap between rich and poor people,

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means all folks should be treated equally.

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, the unemployment ratio will be diminished and all inhabitants get a good job as well as earn proper wages.

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, the government should provide a quality of medical facilities and better education to all inhabitants.

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Canada has been providing

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free education and free medical amenities to their's citizens

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, they can live a better

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rather than other parts of the world. How we can create an ideal community? certainly, there are some solutions

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be practice to create an ideal

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community

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, the ministry

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to provides all amenities to their's citizens in order to they can live

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peaceful nation.

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literate

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level should be reduced in order to many

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, they can contribute to their's own nation.

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but not least pollution should be diminished when we want a perfect community.

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faces many problems from global warming

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, we should more focus on

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one. To conclude, creating an ideal

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is a demanding and challenging mission

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around the world. It seems to be impossible, we can contribute to

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better progress in human history

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some practical ways.

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Topic Vocabulary:

ideal society
equality
social justice
sustainable practices
community engagement
economic stability
cultural diversity
accessible healthcare
fair justice system
educational opportunities
environmental sustainability
active participation
inclusive society

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