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Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

#governments #money #roads #highways #transportation #buses #trains #subways
In today's world, both motorists
as well as
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non drivers
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 rely heavily on modern infrastructure and public transport.
However
, there has always been an argument about which project deserves more finance. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the above two points. If we talk about developing roads and highways, it is
one
 of the most important
aspect
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in
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 a country's development.
For instance
, Dubai is considered to be
one
 of the best tourist destinations precisely because of the excellent roads and the signboards. Apart from
this
, spending money on routes greatly benefits those who are commuting to work from a far distance. They do not have to wait in queues for a long period of time for subways or public buses. Most importantly, better roads would mean reduced accidents and hazards to the pedestrians and motorists.
On the other hand
, investing in public transport
also
 greatly benefits
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society and the tourism industry. Let us take
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 example of Dubai again. They have excelled in
this
 category by providing metro, tram, water taxi as well as land services. In fact, most tourists travel through
one
 of these because it is easy and pocket friendly. Not only visitors
,
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vehicle owners
also
 use the metro regularly to avoid traffic and congestion. And
this
in turn
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 helps to reduce the air pollution as well as encourage the government to spend
further
. Overall, we can
conculde
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conclude
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 both the
above mentioned
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 subjects are as important as
one
 another with their respective advantages. The government of a country should strike a balance between both to ensure the nation as a whole
as well as travellers
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, as well as travellers,
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 can enjoy the services.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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