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Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Few individuals advocate that the
employees
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 at higher positions must have more pay than their colleagues at lower
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.
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 phenomenon has its own pros and cons and I contend that the difference among the salaries of
workers
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 influenced by their roles
in
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a corporation
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corporation
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 is not justifiable, and could lead to catastrophic consequences.
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 with, there are many arguments in the favour of higher incomes of executive
employees
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. As the top leadership of a firm is considered to be
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 brain of it and they devise the roadmaps for it which impact the overall output of the corporation.
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, if an organization does not have lucrative salaries for elite
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, it would not attract intelligent professionals, which cost the productivity of the company.
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,
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 upper class
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employees
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 are well-educated and experienced, so it is quite fair to reward them
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with extra-money
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extra-money
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 for their qualities.
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,
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uniform wages for everyone regardless of their positions could have enormous beneficial effects on society.
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 and foremost, the comparable salaries of
workers
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 could help to decrease the gap between upper and lower socio-economic classes.
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, if the government enhances the minimal per hour wages of other
workers
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 to match with
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, it would help to alleviate poverty in the country.
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,
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 strategy could improve the standard of living in the whole society, as people would have enough money to spend on their welfare
such
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 as education and health. In conclusion, even though more money for the higher position
workers
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 can encourage diligence in others, it can affect adversely
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the whole community. It is need of the hour to develop a mechanism to keep a balance amongst the incomes of various
workers
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • executive compensation
  • income disparity
  • corporate governance
  • incentive structures
  • ethical considerations
  • competitive advantage
  • demotivation
  • pay structures
  • social inequality
  • talent acquisition
  • company culture
  • economic impact
  • leadership roles
  • employee morale
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