Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change.Others however,think that change is always a good thing.Discuss both views and give your own opinion

A set of
people
choose to spend their lives on the same job without changing,while
other
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think it is not important to keep changing.I have mixed
opinion
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,and in
this
essay ,I will discuss both sides
Firstly
,there is
clearly
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defined path for development because of doing the same thing and
also
there is more trust with more responsibility.
For example
90% of employees who have stayed in
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work place
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without changing show loyalty,and at the same time get promoted within the organization they are working for.
Secondly
,there is more stability in doing
same
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thing where you are employed or doing your own business.For
this
reason ,a set of
people
prefer to spend their lives on the same activity without changing
People
always change to learn different skills and ranges of experience especially now the world is changing very fast,there is need to be flexible.Unfortunately,the economy is very unfriendly
therefore
society is eyeing and offer to any promotion or a higher salary.
Although
people
can learn different
occupation
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when they change but it is challenging and interesting at the same time.There
other
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benefits like we
further
our career by meeting
people
with different
experience
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experiences
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and learn from them.For
instant
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80% of
people
can only stay in the same jobs for 2years. In conclusion,Each route
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different opportunity and should depend on choices we make .Neither changing or not doesn't
superceed
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supersede
the other as discussed in
this
essay elaborating of the mixed opinion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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