Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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when some students try to balance their job and studies, which might lead to stress and anxiety. In
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some consequences of the trend will be considered and followed by possible solutions.
To begin
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financial support made by parents, which
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applying for a part-time job in order to meet basic requirements. Freshman year students find it especially challenging if they haven’t experienced living away from home before.
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immense stress in terms of examination sessions, various projects and a myriad of tests.
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, the level of stress might be enhanced by making a living. All these factors have a negative impact on student’s academic performance and health. I can give an example from my own experience
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when I was a student back
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had to work to be able to pay for her rent, not to mention other outcomes are needed to be covered. So, she ended up playing truant because of being sleep-deprived and exhausted. Despite all these causes, there
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possible way to address the issue or at least curb
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management could be a relatively effective solution. A student
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to be overloaded with a tight schedule and lots of activities. So, I suppose that a proper day plan will facilitate students’
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and prioritize do’s in the list including rest time. To sum up, the academic period combined with a job might be a reason for mental and physical issues, which can be worsened by a poor academic result as a consequence.
Nevertheless
, it is still a solvable problem if a person puts enough effort by using their valuable time rationally.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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