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Large companies use sports events to promote their products. Some people think this has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
sports
 marketing is gaining popularity around the world. During
such
 big
events
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 we see athletes,
players
 wearing jerseys sporting big company logos or commercials advertisements between the match breaks. While it is beneficial for the
companies
, in my
opinion
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 I agree that it does have some drawbacks on the part of
players
 and spectators. To embark on, big businesses provide huge funding to the events and advertising a product here work wonders for the
companies
. To illustrate cricket is the most popular
sports
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sport
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 in India and millions of people watch these matches religiously and when people see advertisements that are repeated in every break it prompt the product into the audience’s minds.
This
 way, advertisers earn a lot of sales from
such
 promotions.
Also
, we already see that the Indian cricket team’s costume and equipment
is
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 heavily laden with labels of various
companies
.
On the other hand
, many times the cricketers are asked to promote a brand by thanking the brand in the interviews they give. Athletes that are brand ambassadors to certain brands have
a
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great pressure to keep their image at their best in media and public.
Companies
 pay huge sums of money to
players
 for their endorsements, and
this
 can tempt the
players
 into earning more money in
this
 manner rather than playing. All these things eventually distract a player from his focus
towards
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 the game or sport he is supposed to represent. To sum up, advertising in
sports
 events is appropriate only if it is limited. Excessive promotions take the whole essence of
sports
 and gaming out of the event.
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