Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Absence

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of serious

punishment

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has led to increased insecurity and negative vices.Heavy

punishment

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is important to put to check a community.In my opinion,heavy

punishment

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is important in rehabilitating individuals and reducing

recividism

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recidivism

back to prison.

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and foremost,the presence of

jail birds

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back to prison is because they didn"t have enough time to rehabilitate by either getting

invovled

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involved

in vocational training or

educationa

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educational

education

platform;because the vocational training and education platform provides a good opportunity for learning new skills and gaining knowledge

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relevant for them when they come out of prison as the say goes show them how to fish and they will continue.For

intance

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instance

,knowledge in carpentry will enable one to proceed as a carpenter and avoid bad vices.

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,rehabilitation helps an individual to reform and avoid going back to jail.

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prisoner

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prisoners

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are people too meaning they

also

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have

famillies

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families

and relatives who look up to them for the provision of basic needs;

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they have

peronal

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personal

responsibilities that they need to attend

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anyother

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any other

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hurry

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harry

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,being a father who

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to provide school fees for his siblings.

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to offences will be essential for behaviour change and continuation of private life for the ex-convicts. In summary,heavy

punishment

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will promote deterrence of

exprisoners

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ex-prisoners

from committing crime resulting

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peace and stability in the community .Whereas,failure of capital

punishment

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will promote negative vices in the community

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increasing violence.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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233 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

deterrent effect
retribution
irreversibility
judicial error
human rights
ethical considerations
life imprisonment
perception of violence
rehabilitation
reforming
contentious
societal perception
morality
recidivism
capital punishment
justice system
incarceration
penology

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Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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private transport is creating problems for people. What are these problems and how we can solve this?