computer are being used more and more in education.some people say its positive trend other say its negative impact. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

No doubt, in
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the
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computer
plays an essential role in everyone life
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because
it
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life easier. In every
field
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the
use
of
computer
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increased day by day. some individuals say that it is
positive
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a positive
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development.
However
,
other
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think that it has
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a negative
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impact. In
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i
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will discuss both the view along with my opinion. To embark upon, there
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some reason why
computer
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the computer
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is
essentail
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essential
in
education
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the education
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system
.
First
and foremost, when students doing their
study
while
use
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of
computer
they can gain extra knowledge from
internet
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and understand the actual meaning of difficult words.
secondly
,they can store the important document related to
study
and check it whenever they want. since
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in
education
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system
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it is essential to carry heavy books because all the syllabus related to
study
is not available in one book.
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if students have their own pc it could be easier to store all the data. According to the
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resent
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survey by the university of
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cambridge
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it can be seen that in japan the accuracy rate of
student
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in
study
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increased to high value because they
use
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the computer
a computer
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computer
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computers
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for their
education
.
on the other hand
, there
are
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some reason why
use
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of
computer
in
education
system
create
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creates
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negative
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a negative
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impact on learners.
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, if
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a student
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student
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students
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always
use
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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for
education
it is not good for their health because they could be suffered from eyesight
problem
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problems
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and they can
also
pay little attention to physical activities.To explicate it, in
delhi
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70% of
pupil
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pupils
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use
specs because they suffered from eyesight
problem
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by
use
computer
all the time. Keeping the above facts in view
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believe that
use
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the use
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of
computer
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computers
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is essential in
education
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the education
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system
but
too
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some extent. If
student
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students
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have
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a
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urgent
requriement
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requirement
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computer
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a computer
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then
they can
use
it but not always because young age is a golden time for students if they face health
problem
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problems
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in
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this
little age
then
they can not survive for
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whole life. To put in a nutshell by dropping my pen down,
although
there are some bad impact of using
computer
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a computer
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on
student
health
but
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if learners can
use
pc for only
relavent
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relevant
purpose
then
they can increase their level and skills.
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