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Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Homework for
students
 is a hotly debatable issue While some people opine that it should not be given on daily basis others think that it is crucial for the success of
students
This
 essay shall discuss both sides of the argument followed by my own opinion Bombarding
students
 with assignments affect their physical health adversely.
For instance
, spending after-school hours on completing their lessons leaves them with less
time
 to participate in extra-curricular activities
such
 as games, music and dance leading to
sedentary
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 lifestyle.
Therefore
paucity
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a paucity
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 of
time
 for physical activities results in obesity, stress and other health problems for them.
hence
. teachers should avoid assigning
students
 with lessons at home.
On the contrary
, some people think if children give some
time
 for studies at home
also
 they can easily excel in their exams.
For example
, studying in advance about a particular lesson can help them make most of their classroom discussion
time
This
 way they can perform extraordinary with better learning along with becoming well-versed with
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curriculum
. In my own opinion, homework benefits
students
 not only in their academics performance but
also
learning
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 other skills
such
 s
time
 management, responsibility and prioritization.
Thus
, it is
advicable
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advisable
 for them unless they are not overburdened with it To conclude, homework help
students
 to do well in their studies and achieve success
however
 it should be given in a manner that
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not results
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does not result
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 in
extra
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an extra
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 burden on them.
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