When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

It is often argued that it is more important to choose a
job
with
high
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wage even if it doesn't appeal
you
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.I completely disagree with
this
perspective and I believe that
job
satisfaction
is more than
salary
. We must acknowledge,
i
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think that
job
satisfaction
gives people to sense of
fullfilment
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fulfilment
and happiness that no money can guarantee.If someone gets high lucrative wages but feel tensed on workplace and compromise with his conscience.
Thus
that person will never enjoy his work while pursuing one's interest will always bring
feeling
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a feeling
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of contentment.
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example
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alot
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a lot
of famous researchers made their career choices
not
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because of appealing wages , but because they were passionate about science.
Therefore
, it is more important to choose
that
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kind of work that makes you happy and satisfied.
Secondly
,doing what you like keeps
individual
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motivated and productive .
In other
words
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there
are
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strong relation between
job
satisfaction
and productivity.People who
loves
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their jobs ,can easily excel in their fields and achieve better results than those who consider the
salary
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first
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place ,even though they have
interest
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an interest
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in their
job
or not.
For instance
,many scholars decide to leave their jobs despite
a good wages
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a good wage
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and ventured to become a scientist and after enduring ups and down they become one of the most famous and
well paid
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scholars.
Thus
,jobs that
keeps
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you satisfied are far much better
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than
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that
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than
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the high
salary
packages in long run. To conclude ,I strongly believe that
job
satisfaction
is more beneficial
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than
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that
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than
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high
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a high
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salary
.
This
is because it makes people happy and motivated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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