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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Studying online is becoming increasingly popular. Some people believe that online schooling is so beneficial that traditional classroom-based learning will be replaced while others do not.
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument and provide evidence as to why e-learning will substitute
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education
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. To being with, more and more people are choosing online
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 for they have the chance to save
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 and arrange their daily
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 schedule as they want. Nowadays,
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 is a valuable resource that why e-learning has been a huge benefit for those who always are in a rush
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 because they can watch the classes whenever they desire. Despite a huge number of
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 have to work, in order to pay for their scholarship, now they all are able to keep doing both activities without any problem.
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 the amount of
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 that
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 can save
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 of not having to travel any more can be spent in their personal lives. In many universities, a surprising increment in applicant’s solicitudes for their online courses has been registered.
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, most of
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 educational institutes have to reorganize some of their
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 classes into
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online courses so as to keep receiving more
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.
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, those who claim the opposite believe that traditional
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 is the best way for
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 to develop their social skills. Learning in a traditional classroom-based course make the
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interact not only with the professor but with the others learners too. Rising abilities
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 as, how to express an idea, working in groups or just making a friend, are vital things that will help them in their future.
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, in a wide variety of jobs working as a team is something natural. If someone never underwent
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, the group will have more problems in order to achieve their goals.
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education
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 makes
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 learn about a particular subject while they develop
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. In conclusion,
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 believe that e-learning is the future
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education
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 because it
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 us to spend our
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 as we wish. People will be able to study from their homes and enjoy these extra hours. Despite some of
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 may have a job, now, with the help of
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technology they can
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 in a course in order to keep learning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-Learning
  • face-to-face education
  • remote learning
  • virtual classroom
  • webinar
  • digital platform
  • self-paced learning
  • interactive learning
  • course accessibility
  • academic networking
  • pedagogy
  • synchronous/asynchronous sessions
  • MOOCs (Massive Open Online Courses)
  • edtech (educational technology)
  • holistic development
  • practical skills
  • collaborative learning
  • digital divide
  • curriculum adaptation
  • technological literacy
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