It is sometimes thought that people who travel outside of their own country are more tolerant and understanding of others. To what extent do you agree?

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In today's era, travelling is quite popular, not even among teenagers but the retired population loves to travel overseas as well. there is no doubt that
travellers
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are more patient and understanding when they travel to other countries.
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of all,
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system of each and every
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is different, which is tremendously new for foreigners.
Travellers
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need to have more tolerance when are getting introduced to the new environment in order to stay there.
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, each and every
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has different cultures, religions and rituals.
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need to have knowledge about local peoples' cultures and rituals to prevent religious or cultural controversies.
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to that, They need to respect the religious sentiments of people of other countries
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as in India, according to Hindu religion,
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the cow
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is prohibited to eat. The cow is being
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by Hindu people and it has a great deal of religious significance. A foreigner does need to have an understanding
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others in order to survive in other countries. In the conclusion, I would like to say that there is no doubt,
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do need to have more knowledge about the
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where they are planning to visit. they should hire a tour guide or do thorough research before arrival
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a new
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. It will make it easy for them to visit and explore different areas, living standards and can
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be beneficial for the financial planning of their tour.
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