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Much of the food people eat gets transported from farms thousands of miles away. Some believe it would be better for the environment and economy if people only ate food from local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Opinions are divided
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 it is beneficial to primarily consume locally grown produce, as opposed to eating food coming from distant farms. From my perspective, while the consumption of native goods is a positive trend, there are
also
 drawbacks.
One
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 the one hand, there are two primary advantages of spending
regional
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 merchandise. Perhaps the salient benefit is that levels of pollution can be mitigated.
This
 is because the goods are locally available and it does not have to travel a huge distance which results in adding pollution.
Secondly
, eating domestic food enhances local economic growth. So if goods are distributed in the local
market
,
this
 can increase the revenue of the local farmers which in turn leads to increasing the per capita income.
For example
, In India, farming contributes to more than 60% of the national revenue, people buying from the local
market
 will only increase the turnover of the country. One of the main demerits of consuming food from the local
market
 could result in lesser consumer choices.
This
 is because the
products
 from the local
market
 limit the choices for a consumer, and he is only able to purchase
products
 that are sold in his city. To illustrate, an individual who is
well-traveled
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 would like to buy some international
products
, which he would have indulged in while his travel and the lack of availability of these
products
 in his country can disappoint him. The availability of
products
 from across the world can be more satisfying to meet consumer needs. In conclusion,
although
 some individuals due to their personal preferences and satisfaction would like to buy
products
 from the international
market
.
However
, in my view, it would be more beneficial for nations to sell their
products
 locally, which will result in benefiting the economy by an increase in revenue, and
also
 the environment by reducing the pollution level
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable agriculture
  • food miles
  • locavore (a person who endeavors to eat only locally grown or produced food)
  • seasonality
  • food sovereignty
  • agricultural exports
  • dietary diversity
  • economies of scale
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