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The number of advertisements for charities on television and the Internet seems to be increasing. What is causing this? Is this a positive or negative development

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Advertisements are a very efficient source for charities and non-profit organizations. Advertisements can be on the internet or television.
This
 essay will discuss how it is an overall positive development on the society in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
,
this
 is an era of technology. Several charitable organisations advertised their charity over the internet or by social media. Some foundations paste posters on the walls. The internet is a reliable source in which a donor can directly contact the fundraiser.
For instance
, the Khalsa aid organization is all over the world. They help needy
people
. Many
people
 around the world are connecting with them either physically help or monetary help. They give life to several folks.
Moreover
, With advertisements, many
people
 join fundraiser organizations and they help the poor
people
 either in education or in food. Some organisations do medical help.
This
 is a really positive development. With
this
, many
people
 get education, food, clothes and so on. Previously, there was a lack of supervision
as a result
, funds did not reach the victim. But now it provides transparency to the donor. To conclude, from the above-mentioned views it is clear that advertisement is a good source to know about the registered charities. It provides transparency in every transaction made by fundraisers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nonprofit organization
  • crowdfunding
  • philanthropy
  • altruism
  • donor fatigue
  • corporate social responsibility
  • social media influence
  • charitable giving
  • sponsorship
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • awareness campaign
  • digital marketing
  • emotional appeal
  • fundraising
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