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WEALTHY NATIONS SHOULD ASSIST POORER COUNTRIES WITH HUMANITARIAN RELIEF DURING NATURAL DISASTERS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#nations #countries #relief #disasters
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In recent decades, the number of natural
disasters
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 has increased in some places over the world and caused many detrimental effects on people and properties. It is argued that undeveloped
countries
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 should be assisted by rich
countries
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 on humanitarian grounds to deal with natural
disasters
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. In
this
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 essay, I will present my two arguments for why I agree with
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 statement.
To begin
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 with, wealthy nations have the advantages of technology to cope with natural
disasters
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. Rich nations have enough financial resources to provide aids to victims of
disasters
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. If developed
countries
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 use innovations that could predict, avoid and even control natural
disasters
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, undeveloped
countries
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 could limit the damages from the natural
disasters
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.
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, in the United Kingdom, some experts have developed a machine that can forecast storms.
This
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 machine has been brought to Southeast Asia to help the local people prevent economic damages.
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, the support of medical
science
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 from wealthy nations is
also
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 necessary on moral grounds. Advances in
medicine
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science
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 prevent the spread of dangerous epidemics and a large number of unnecessary deaths.
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, In the COVID-19 epidemic, Africa went through a terrible pandemic with millions of deaths because many
countries
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 do not have enough
medicine
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 to offer to their citizens. United States gave support about
medicine
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science
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 valued at 2 billion USD to many African
countries
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 to fight
this
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 epidemic. In conclusion, developed
countries
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 should assist undeveloped
countries
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 because they have advantages in equipment, economy and
medicine
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science
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 to deal with natural
disasters
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. It is hoped that in the near future, governments from both wealthy and poor
countries
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 cooperate more to deal with natural
disasters
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 and make the world a better place for everyone.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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