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People who have been in prison become good citizens later and it is often argued that these are the people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what do you agree or disagree?

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people
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. It is often argued that communicating with the
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 helps the youngsters to walk
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 right path. I think it has both significant positives and negatives which I will discuss in
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, A lot of
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 we made is mostly in our teenage because we have no idea regarding the consequences. So, due to many issues in our young age
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 as anger, detachment with parents, lack of education and lack of control at that moments leads to many crimes.
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, one can learn a lot of
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 it is a great idea to talk with
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 as they can clearly explain the moment which
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do
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mistakes
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life in prison along with
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the
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from
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 our dear one's.
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, My hometown has a central jail which is eminent in our state. So, there is a petrol bunk in which the
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prisoners
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. Despite
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, once
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communication with them, I have learned
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 of
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 controlled my anger.
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, talking with them helps us to learn
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 are few negatives that all the persons in the prison may not be good. They might have some bad
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intensions
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intentions
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. They might be rude
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 others who visit them. They might not suggest good
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 which helps for their future because they are not much educated as well as they think they are doing good like these
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 of
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, talking to them makes young
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to
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learn
such
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 should be selected who has good mark and reputation in the jail.
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 of
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life is and how
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 can be done
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 a fraction of
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. Interaction with the good
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 helps the teenagers to learn the best
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 in their
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lives
life
lifes
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  • consequences
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