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the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents.

#visits #australia #residents
The script graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of yearly trips to Australia
bye
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by
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 the foreigner. The chart shows data where the visitors arrive from ( 1975- 2005) Overall, the statistic
of
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for
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2005
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the 2005
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year
 increased better than other years. The index of
1995
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the 1995
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year
 risen approximately doubled compared to
1975
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the 1975
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year
. The same situation
shown
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 in comparison
1985
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between 1985
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 and 2005
year
. The top rate belonged to Japan in the table, in
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addition
additon
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 the least pointer became in China. In terms of the number of visitors, China,
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USA
Usa
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the Usa
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, Britain can't reach
to
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a
million
. The minimum show was appreciated with 1.1
million
 in the others. The high rate
occured
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occurred
 in Japan with 3.2
million
.
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, the maximum
increasing
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 happened sharply in Japan from
1975
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the 1975
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year
 to
2005
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the 2005
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year
. The least rising belonged to China and
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USA
Usa
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the Usa
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. The maximum pointer was illustrated in 1995 compared to 1985 (just under 25
million
 and more than 15
million
 respectively).
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