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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. But others say films should have educational value. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #purpose #films #value
NOWADAYS, SOME
PEOPLE
 THINK THAT FILMS SHOULD JUST ENTERTAIN BUT OTHERS DON'T AGREE WITH
THIS
 STATEMENT AND PREFER EDUCATIONAL MOVIES.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL SHED LIGHT ON THE TWO DIFFERENT VIEWPOINTS.
FIRSTLY
 MOST OF THE
PEOPLE
 SPEND ALL THEIR LIFETIME WORKING, SO IN LEISURE TIME IS UNDERSTANDABLE THAT THEY JUST WANT
CHILL
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 AND RELAX, MAYBE WHY NOT, GOING TO THE CINEMA FOR WATCHING A MOVIE
NOT
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IS NOT
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 TOO SERIOUS.
FURTHERMORE
, THERE ARE
SOME
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MANY DIFFERENT
TYPE
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TYPES
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 OF
MOVIE
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MOVIES
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 LIKE HORROR, ADVENTURE, DRAMA, COMEDY AND REDUCING EVERYTHING TO EDUCATIONAL IS LIKE TAKING OUT THE COLORS FROM THE RAINBOW. IT IS NOT A MOVIE TASK TO EDUCATE
PEOPLE
. FAMILY AND SCHOOL ARE THE RIGHT PLACES FOR THAT PURPOSE. ON THE OTHER HAND, IT IS FAIR TO SAY THAT THERE ARE SO MANY UNPOLITE
PEOPLE
 IN
THIS
 COUNTRY AND A LITTLE PART OF
THIS
 MESS IS
ALSO
 THE MEDIA AND CINEMA'S FAULT. IT IS NOT GOOD FOR A CHILD TO WATCH FILMS WHERE
PEOPLE
 CHEAT, STEAL AND KILL EACH OTHER YELLING BAD WORDS. TO SUM UP, BOTH VIEWPOINTS ARE RIGHT BUT
FOR
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 MY PERSONAL OPINION IS NOT FAIR
TRY
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 TO TAKE OF THE COLORS FROM THE LIFE. IT CAN BE A FILM, A SONG OR WHATEVER. IT'S BETTER FOR
THE
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society to FACE THE BEATY AND
ALSO
 THE MONSTER.
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