It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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problems has always been a hot topic of interest. While it is believed to be paid for

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' healthy lifestyle promotion, some still consider it is better for illness treatments. From my perspective, I am more convinced by the former point.

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treatments

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for

illness

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. In their opinions, the officials need to hold accountability for citizens’ issues so spending on treatments is

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must for them. Given that the national budget is contributed by

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, it needs to be used for helping people suffering from issues

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as epidemics.

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, the

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is used efficiently and the quality of living is

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improved.

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, I still strongly advocate the view that encouragement for healthier lifestyles is still the optimal solution.

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of all, thanks to

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way, individuals can save lots of

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for other purposes. When public

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is spent on

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as vaccinations or vitamins, the risks for going to hospitals or taking serious and complicated medical health services, which can cost a plethora of

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, will be reduced.

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, the expense of

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for prevention services is still superior,

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, for children or elderly living in poverty.

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a favourable way

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saving the national budget. If it is not spent on

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, there will be not only more serious diseases but

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various variants, which are much more complex to deal with.

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, national

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will be paid for other kinds of

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technological devices and machines to face these problems, leading to lots of exorbitant fees. In conclusion, governments should raise awareness of illness prevention for all citizens.

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, the quality of living will be boosted and more and more problems can be reduced.