It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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problems has always been a hot topic of interest. While it is believed to be paid for

residents

' healthy lifestyle promotion, some still consider it is better for illness treatments. From my perspective, I am more convinced by the former point.

To begin

with, it is understandable for the belief of some people

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funding

on

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treatments

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for

illness

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residents

. In their opinions, the officials need to hold accountability for citizens’ issues so spending on treatments is

the

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must for them. Given that the national budget is contributed by

residents

, it needs to be used for helping people suffering from issues

such

as epidemics.

Therefore

, the

money

is used efficiently and the quality of living is

also

improved.

On the other hand

, I still strongly advocate the view that encouragement for healthier lifestyles is still the optimal solution.

First

of all, thanks to

this

way, individuals can save lots of

money

for other purposes. When public

money

is spent on

preventions

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as vaccinations or vitamins, the risks for going to hospitals or taking serious and complicated medical health services, which can cost a plethora of

money

, will be reduced.

Thus

, the expense of

residents

for prevention services is still superior,

in particular

, for children or elderly living in poverty.

Additionally

,

this

solution is

also

a favourable way

for

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saving the national budget. If it is not spent on

preventions

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, there will be not only more serious diseases but

also

various variants, which are much more complex to deal with.

Then

, national

money

will be paid for other kinds of

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technological devices and machines to face these problems, leading to lots of exorbitant fees. In conclusion, governments should raise awareness of illness prevention for all citizens.

Thus

, the quality of living will be boosted and more and more problems can be reduced.