The best way to protect the environment is to use local resource, such as food or building materials rather than transporting resources from other places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that the safest means to keep the
environment
safe is by using commodities produced within
Change preposition
apply
instead
of transporting goods
and services from one place
to the other. In this
essay will
I fully agree with Verb problem
apply
this
measure.
The consumption of locally produced goods
has many advantages and is stressless compared with transporting resources from place
to place
. Also
, consuming locally produced goods
and services helps in recycling wastes
in the community.
A hygienic Fix the agreement mistake
waste
environment
is very suitable for inhabitation. This
is because the inhabitants will ensure that their surroundings are deprived of hazardous materials. For
instance
consumption of local produce Add a comma
instance,
go
a long way in ensuring that nations Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
the
best and Add a missing verb
are the
utilizes
everything around them. In the ancient days when transportation was poor, the public was only able to consume what they produced. Correct subject-verb agreement
utilize
This
was either because of the distance or language barriers. With current trading and transportations
, some countries dump Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
goods
they no longer need. Whereas
the nations who need them do not see this
as hazardous until a much later time when there is an outbreak of disease. Therefore
consuming local goods
will prevent the dumping of unwanted goods
in the community where a safe environment
would have been suitable for the people
in the locality.
Another reason in support of the use of locally produced commodities is that some of these are very rich and the quest for money will make local producers sell the best and depend on the not so good
ones. Add a hyphen
not-so-good
For example
, fishermen do not feed on the best catches. They will rather dwell on those which are not okay for the market to make money. No wonder why children of fishermen look malnourished compared to children of non-fishermen. Where there is no transportation from place
to place
, those in the locality will enjoy the items manufactured within. Libya once practised it. They extract their crude oil, refine it and use it. Yet they rank among one of the richest countries in Africa. Where locals depend on what they produced
, they thrive well in them and their originality cannot be compared with another. Wrong verb form
produce
This
is very rampant in communist countries like North Korea, Russia and China. Therefore
, to be a wealthy person, one must depend on materials sourced from around the environment
.
conclusively, utilizing local resources is helpful in not only providing a safe environment
but also
in providing healthy foods to the people as well as
improve
Wrong verb form
improving
selfsustainence
. I truly agree with Correct your spelling
self-sustainence
this
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Task Response
Task Response: The essay does not fully address the extent of the writer's agreement with the prompt. It should be clearly stated in the introduction whether the writer agrees, disagrees, or partly agrees with the statement. The body paragraphs should fully support the stated position with relevant arguments and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The essay lacks a clear and consistent logical structure. The ideas are presented in a haphazard manner, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's line of thought. The introduction and conclusion are present but need to be more explicit and reflective of the main points discussed in the body paragraphs. The main points are not consistently supported with relevant examples and arguments, leading to a lack of coherence and cohesion.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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