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The graph gives the information about figures of underground station passenger in London city related to different time during a day. The earliest time when
passengers
 use the underground stations is 06.00 a.
m
 the latest is 10.00
p
.
m
.
Accordingly
 the graph, in the early morning about 100
passengers
 use the underground stations, and the figures double increase at 7.00 a.
m
. and
then
 go up dramatically till 400
passengers
 in just one hour. The numbers of
people
 go down with about 100
passengers
 in one hour and 150 in 2 hours. From 10.00 a.
m
. to 3.00
p
.
m
. the numbers of
passengers
 fluctuate between 150 and 250
people
then
 go down till 100 visitors at 4-00
p
.
m
. From 4.00
p
.
m
 till 6.00
p
.
m
. the numbers of
passengers
 increase sharply and gain a peak of about 390
people
 than till 8.00
p
.
m
. there is a sudden fall till 150
people
 and for over three hours the figures go slightly up and down. In general, the most crowded period is in the peak hours which is mean at 08.00 a.
m
. with about 400
people
 and at 6.00
p
.
m
. with approximately 390 persons who use the underground stations in London.
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