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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Artificial intelligence is gradually taking over many jobs. It is argued that only people commuting by
cars
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, trucks, and buses will be the passengers as these
vehicles
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 would not need drivers in the future. There are more disadvantages
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 as
unemployment
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 and
risk
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 of
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 and
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 essay will discuss how they outweigh the advantages.
Road
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 safety should be a priority of any human being. Artificially intelligent
vehicles
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 have a fascinating image but there are demerits attached to them.
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, the major drawback of
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vehicles
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 would be
road
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accidents
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 as driving is a human task and it involves high skill knowledge which can not be replicated by robots or machines. While Tesla is the
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 company to manufacture
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cars
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 which caught the eye of people, it came into the limelight for some negative reasons. According to a report in the New York Times, 65% of tesla's
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cars
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 were involved in fatal
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accidents
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 which led the Government to make a rule according to which the driver's seat can not be left vacant.
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, a large number of civilians earn their bread and butter by driving buses, and trains and if all
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 are automated it will lead to a big problem called
unemployment
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. A survey report back in 2018 mentioned that 30-40% of lower-income groups are employed in driving a lorry, bus or car. Since the introduction of automatically moving lorries and
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, 15% of them have lost their jobs.
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, the percentage of
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 in artificially independent
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 is directly proportional to the percentage of
unemployment
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. Driving is a tedious job and a lot of time is wasted on the
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. The only merit of
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cars
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 would be more productivity as a lot of time is wasted in driving to and from work. Mankind can do important tasks while sitting on the passenger seat
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 as send emails, attend virtual meetings, work on a project, and so on.
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 reason alone is not enough to risk one's life as there are massive chances of getting involved in
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 that can lead to serious injuries. Conclusively, there are more demerits of automatically driven
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 than merits. There is a luring advantage of comfort which is not worth the risk of
accidents
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 and
unemployment
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. Humans should drive
cars
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, buses or trucks as it is a high skill job and can not be matched by artificial intelligence.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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