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“Some people believe that people have the right to university education, and the government should make it free no matter what their financial background. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

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University
education
 has become a necessity in the world today and is key for most
people
 to grow and succeed. Many
people
 may argue that there should be a universal right to free
education
. Even though I believe that
this
 may suit many
people
, I believe that it is not the most practical decision to implement for the government. I believe that it is not the most practical as governments may have bigger issues to deal with. Having to invest and support
education
 for everyone will result in a higher opportunity cost for the government and put a strain on the system. Many undeveloped regions
such
 as Haiti would not be able to afford
this
 policy. Their focus is on providing basic necessities and building better infrastructure for the safety and development of their
people
.
On the other hand
, a
university
education
 is something that can make or break an individual's life. I believe free
education
 encourages parents to send their children to higher levels of
education
.
This
 is important as in less economically developed countries,
this
 gives women a chance to change their lives and move away from any prejudice.
Also
, everyone around the world would have a more equal chance to succeed and grow, despite their financial status. By having access to
university
education
, individuals can have the opportunity to live better lives, have better jobs and incomes and escape the vicious cycle of poverty, as they are able to support themselves and their families and can
also
 benefit from a higher standard of living. To conclude,
although
 many
people
 may see
university
education
 as a right, it causes immense pressure on the government and is not the most practical decision to implement for economies.
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