Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Ohter argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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very common in our society is that we are bit perfects, and

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unsatisfactory job or a shortage of money. So, some people (including me) believe that it is

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best to accept a bad

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why. As I already said, we are not perfect, and

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bad

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life, in

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is when you have to be stronger to afront

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ourselves. A famous phrase said that of the fails you can learn, more than the victory. Think that you are not the unique person

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the other people, maybe

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people will help you tomorrow. In my point of view, I am in the middle point between accept and improve, because you must do both. Because you cannot still accept a bad

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if you are not doing something. But

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, is very probable that you will fail or maybe create

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worst

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you already have. In conclusion, with the bad

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