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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#cultures #technology
Cultures
 play a very important role in our lives. It is said that with the development of
technology
 the traditional
cultures
 will be lost as both traditional
cultures
 and
technology
 do not go hand in hand. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the reasons for
this
 opinion and I will give my opinion about the same. With the growth of
technology
 and the ocean of information available on the internet,
people
 have started looking for logic before following traditional cultural practices. Superstitious practices have stopped due to growing awareness among the
people
.
Technology
 has eased our lives so much that most of the cultural practices that were followed in the past at the time of marriages, if of no relevance now.
For instance
, in India, earlier, when a girl used to get married and move to her husbands' place, her parents gave her enough money and gold for her security as back
then
 meeting and communicating was not easy,
however
 now with the
technology
 available
this
 custom need not be followed.
Therefore
, many educated and learned families do not follow
this
 culture anymore.
On the other hand
, with the growth of
technology
 and the availability of information about the life of
people
 all around the world, on social media like Facebook, Instagram, youtube, more and more
people
 are getting fascinated by western culture.
Also
, due to the significant influence of the glamour industry on
people
, they try to imitate them and celebrate festivals and follow traditions like they do.
For instance
, in India, all festivals have spiritual reasons, and in the past,
people
 prayed, met friends and families, shared sweets and good wishes.
On the contrary
, now festivals are celebrated in two ways either by going on exotic holidays or by partying with friends and families. To cut long story short, I completely assent with the view that
technology
 and traditional culture can be in harmony and the
cultures
 will be a by-gone as
technology
 keeps on developing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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