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The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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recent years, there has been a significant rise in the number of industries around the world. With the inventions taking place so frequently, a new establishment is set up every day. Some people believe that to protect
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nature, workshops that create hazardous
waste
 without their in-house
built up
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waste
 treatment equipment should be shut down by the government.
This
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further
emphasis
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on
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choosing alternatives
instead
 of closing them. Earlier setting up a mill used to be a cumbersome task. Various formalities were required to be fulfilled due to which not
much
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 people invested in them.
However
, with the introduction of novel norms that are not stricter, it is now easier to establish a business unit.
Consequently
, a majority of the yards break the laws in the form of releasing their nuclear
waste
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 the atmosphere. A degradation in the biosphere is caused because of it. The industrial units which consistently do not follow the law should be discontinued by the regulators.
On the other hand
, liquidating offices right away that cause an adverse effect on the environment would result in more harm than
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good. Other numerous issues would arise
such
 as unemployment and shortage of products in the market. In my opinion, certain warnings should be given to the
law breakers
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 before they are completely dissolved.
Further
, the local authorities can promote self
waste
 purification technology by announcing distinct rewards for the undertakings that install their own regimens. A
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balance
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 approach should be adopted by the regulators. Providing various incentives and raising awareness about the importance of
processing
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the processing
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of
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waste
 can help in motivating the business to act in accordance with the protocols.
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