Some people believe that parents should teach Children how to be good members of society however others believe that school the place to learn this discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People
differ
greately
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whether good manners should be to
children
by
parents
or educational institutes.
This
essay shall discuss both sides of the argument followed by my own opinion that teachers can teach students in a more formal and disciplined way. On one hand,
people
who advocate that
parents
role
is more vital in
children
social behaviour may argue that
children
consider their
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as
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model
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. As young
children
imitate their
parents
' and
thus
learn from them how to react in various social situations in a most positive way.
For instance
, most of the
children
start their education at the age of three and till
then
the only teacher is their guardians who imbibe and cultivate basic manners in them.
Therefore
,
parents
can guide them to become responsible
people
by setting examples in real life
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On the other hand
, others argue that school can provide a more formal approach to help Juvinials in becoming responsible citizens of society. These institutes use more tested and tried methods to guide kids in developing
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towards other
people
.
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, they can use daily activities
such
as
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and effectively teach them
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response to various
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issues. In my opinion,
school
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play
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vital
role
in guiding their pupils due to their formal techniques and including
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as part of
curriculum
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.
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,
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of
parents
on account of their busy working schedules increases the responsibility of these education departments to inculcate good manners in them. To Conclude, while
parents
can become
role
model
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for their young
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it is
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who
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can teach them in
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formal approach and help them to become
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of society.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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