Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want . Is this a good way to raise children ? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older ?

Nowadays, it is said some parents raise their
children
by buying them whatever they ask for and allowing their
children
to do whatever they want.
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type of parenting and the consequences when the kids
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get older. If every time you buy everything that your child asks you, they will never learn to fight and work hard to gain what they want. When they
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get older
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they will go out
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bubble and they will face the adult world, they will be totally not ready to fit on their legs and they for sure will get depressed and frustrated. A
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task is to drive, step by step, their
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to become self-sufficient and responsible. If they always allow their kids to do what they want they will never learn to respect the rules and the authorities. The best way
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my personal opinion is to allow them to do new activities according
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their ages and their reliability.
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, I live in Tully and here there are many rivers with crocodiles, I can not allow my son to go fishing with his friends if I am not totally sure I will not go to do it in a safe place.
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my kid asked me to buy him play station. I did but before
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said that three conditions that he has to respect to make it happen: 1) He has a new duty, cutting the grass of the garden
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every ten days until he turns 18 years old; 2) Studying at least one hour before start playing; 3) Don't play more than two hours a day; Obviously he answered yes and for sure he will disattend one of these rules.
To sum up
, I totally disagree with parents that spoil their
children
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  • responsibility
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