Computer is becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of computer use in education and give your own opinion.

There is no doubt that
computers
have recently become supporting tools for teaching and educating in
classes
. While many people are still concerned about the negative results of the dependence on
computers
, I believe that it would bring more advancements for
teachers
and
students
in education. On the one hand, the overuse of
computers
in classrooms might lead to some potential
risk
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to
students
and the outcome of lessons.
Firstly
, the dependence on all presentations on
computers
may make
students
less creative and motivated to address tasks and exercises.
For example
,
students
do not need to write by hand or prepare lessons before coming to
classes
, they just listen to and understand from electronic programs on
computers
.
Secondly
, another detrimental effect may be the low efficiency of
classes
due to
lack
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of interactions between
teachers
and
students
. Many
students
just focus on
computers
and they can use
computers
for other purposes like playing video games, using social media and one teacher is unable to control and observe all
students
' actions. Eventually, some
students
complete their
classes
without understanding or acquiring useful knowledge.
On the other hand
, I advocate the appropriate use of
computers
will bring us tremendous benefits.
First
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and foremost effect is the visual and animation techniques that conventional methods could not help
students
to understand some subjects carefully.
Instead
, references and supporting tools on
computers
may inspire
students
to link or connect all ideas more easily and logically.
Furthermore
, many
softwares
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on
computers
lessen the amount of work that a teacher has to evaluate and score every single test.
This
could be done by automatic examinations and scoring immediately after finishing the test.
As a result
,
teachers
have more time to prepare lessons and
students
can easily review or recheck their results on
computers
. In conclusion, applying
computers
in
classes
might have inevitable drawbacks, but it seems to me that
computers
will benefit both
students
and
teachers
if we use them in the right way.

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