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It is true that schoolers who unsucceed at school can be highly successful in their adult life. In general, it is actually a positive development because they can acquire experiences not only for study but also life by trial and error.

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The main cause of success from making
mistakes
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 in education is student’s desire about learning new things. The young at
school
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 want to get the hang of how all the things in
this
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 world work because they want to broaden their horizon, as well as their curiosity, grow so well at that time.
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, some kids want to create bomb but that do not have any clues or experiences about it.
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 they exploded the laboratory sometimes, they
finally
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 know how to make
bomb
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a bomb
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. Overall, I think the most important factor to get a successful
life
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 is making
mistakes
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 in
learning
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the learning
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 process. Making faults helps people gain skills, experiences, they can gain a deep insight into something, or even find out a new way to do it better, faster and more successful for the coming time. To illustrate, a large
amount
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 of pupils have never failed at
school
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 who is always egotistic about their intelligence, when
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get
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 into
life
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then
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 they make
mistakes
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 which will make them frustrated about themselves, do not accept their faults, or give up at the beginning, maybe do not dare to try it again.
In
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other
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the other
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 hand, people who have failed at
school
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for
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apply
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several times, when they meet problems,
they
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apply
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think
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 normal and do not hesitate to remake it. To sum up, it is clear that failed at
school
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 leads many people to a successful
life
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.
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, it is evident that no one is born perfect and does not make
mistakes
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 in their whole
life
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. Do not hesitate to fail many times and learn from that.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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