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In spite of advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Technological advancements have had a tremendous impact on the agricultural industry.
However
, a significant portion of the world's population face problems
such
 as famine and even death by starvation. In my opinion,
this
 is because innovations are really accessible to developing
countries
 and can be solved by raising funds. One of the latest techniques
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plied to agriculture is genetic engineering. The problem,
however
, is that genetically modified plants are expensive to produce and
therefore
 cannot be afforded by
countries
 in need.
For example
, many children in Africa suffer from vitamin A deficiency and as a solution Golden rice was Invented. The genetically modified race contain
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a high percentage of Vitamin A than usual and would assuage the issue but it but its cost rendered the idea futile. I believe that the best way to solve the problem is to direct the most humanitarian funds towards these advances : education and agricultural infrastructure. Many believe that Food aids help these people but it is only a temporary solution used by unscrubbed just people in power.
Therefore
, international organizations and governments must redirect money into helping build better farms, provide more modern equipment and ensure the vegetation is accessible to all in the working classes. In conclusion, developing
countries
 face a multitude of issues that limit them from taking advantage of new technology and
therefore
, funding must be redirected towards helping these
countries
. After all, technology advancements must strive to decrease the gap between the rich and the poor, and not
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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