In many countries schools have severe problems with the student behavior. what do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Undeniably, students
behaviour
have been a controversial topic nowadays. The majority of the schools in most nations are facing difficulty with student
behaviour
.
This
essay will elucidate the major causes for the aforementioned statement and the solutions to tackle these issues.
To begin
with, the major source of
such
bad
behaviour
in children is due to the long exposure to the internet and social media. There
are
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tremendous violent content on the internet and students are easily attracted to it.
In addition
, through mobile
phones
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they can access the web anytime and anywhere.
For instance
, dramas having abusive language have a negative impact on teenagers.
Furthermore
, kids of working
parents
are often unattended and
as a result
, they are free to do whatever they wish.
In addition
, due to excessive use of social media, young ones are often engaged in bad company.
On the contrary
, these issues should be dealt
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with proper guidance before they become dangerous.
Firstly
, working
parents
should arrange for someone to look after their children while they are away.To illustrate, arranging a babysitter will not only help monitor the kids but
also
keep them companySecondly
parents
should restrict the overuse of mobile phones.
Moreover
, they should closely watch the contents children watch on the internet. To conclude, schools have intense difficulties with the bad
behaviour
of the students. And these mainly occur due to prolonged use of the
intenet
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and negligence of
parents
.
Hence
to resolve
this
issue,
parents
should ensure someone's at home and
also
needs to monitor the use of mobile phones.

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