Some people who failed at school can be highly successful in their adult life. Discuss why does this happen? And what are the main factors to get a successful life?

It has been seen that a few
school
drop-outs tend to achieve great
success
in their
life
.
This
essay lays emphasis on the main cause of the high
success
rate among the failed
students
and I believe hard work and clear
aim
are the two main traits of a prosperous
life
. The fundamental reason for academically failed
students
'
success
is that they pay firm attention and devote their entire
time
to their
goals
. Drop-outs have no other educational responsibilities to cater to than their
life
goals
. For them, working for their ultimate
goals
is the only task left in their lives
hence
they give their best shot to achieve their targets. Bill Gates, president of Microsoft, is a good paradigm of
this
. He was expelled from the
school
due to his poor performance and he worked tirelessly to make Microsoft Windows
then
become the richest man on the earth.
School
attendees,
on the other hand
, have to cope with the vast syllabus and in order to secure higher scores; they dispense their large proportion of
time
to the curriculum. After schooling,
students
hunt for the job and are
then
left with no
time
to pursue their passion or dream. Working tirelessly and clarity about the goal are two major attributes of a successful
life
. Considering clarity in
aim
at
first
, the
aim
of work should be outlined
initially
and it ought to be very crisp and clear. Failures more often than not change their motives; they follow the crowd and go for short term achievements. Winners set a long term goal and endeavour to arrest it.
Also
, in order to ensure the victory in targets, zealous work plays a pivotal role. The person should convert every wall of the obstacles into the bridge with his endless efforts. Virat Kohli, a prominent player of the Indian cricket team, is a suitable example who made his mind to become a cricketer in his early
life
from
school
time
and practised for 18 years long
time
. He resultantly is the world's best batsman in the current
time
due to his efforts and a clear
aim
. In conclusion, owing to the attentive nature of
students
, who failed in schools, for their targets, they arrest
success
in their
life
. Zeal, tenacity and a clear mindset about the
goals
are two main characteristics of being
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