In some parts of the world, people have become more focused on themselves than their communities. What problems can this situation cause and how can they be solved?

Nowadays people in the contemporary area are being more concentrate on themselves than their society.
, many issues can be brought into these communities, and it could involve high-priority life areas
as relationships and ecology.
, in parts of the world where modern technologies are permitted to the public, people are allowed to find out any information and do their job with different gadgets; due to
,innovation there is no need to meet with persons anymore. It could lead them to become an antisocial society, where all members want to benefit themselves only.
As a result
nation will be destroyed from the inside.
issue can be solved by limiting the exploitation of devices in humans’ daily routines.
, a huge ecological disaster may damage some regions because people don't think about the consequences of their actions and what reflection these actions have. A good example of
problem is left rubbish in public places. Only one piece of garbage cannot harm the environment, but if every one of us will pollute the surroundings in future,
, the
generations will not be able to see nature as beautiful as we have in the present’s days. Under those circumstances, all humans no matter where they live and what they do
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should care about their relationship to the world and its’ inhabitants.

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