Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather that in secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages ?

It is believed that studying
a
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international
languauge
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at
primary
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level at
school
is more beneficial for pupils than learning it from secondary
school
. Even though there are various benefits to
this
, it
also
brings some demerits to students as well, which will be discussed at both points in the following essay. On the one hand, there are numerous benefits to
children
which
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are able to learn a different
languageat
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at primary
school
.
To begin
,
this
is
initial
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an initial
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idea to improve and achieve their
language
skills in future because
children
could easily learn knowledge and absorb several things from
teacher
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and parents normally taught them. Some teachers would start to teach them in another
language
,
for example
, basic
english
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which build up basic
vocabularies
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such
as animals stuff around them.
This
leads to
teach
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them to love
study
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in foreign languages. Apart from
this
, another point is it is perfect
programs
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for some parents who have sufficient time or knowledge about languages to teach by themselves. Most
of
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parents
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hope that
school
will bring more effective
such
as for the primary level. Despite the positives to studying a foreign
language
since
children
were at primary
school
, some negative
apects
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need to consider.
First
of all, admission tuition for schools with foreign
language
programes
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programmes
programs
programme

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is by far more expensive than other normal schools,
in addition
, some schools collect
extra
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an extra
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fee
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for
teahing
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teaching

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by native teachers. A
further
point is that with grown
children
, it is easy to get
distraction
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from friends or other activities in
school
, resulting in spending less time to concentrate learning
another languages
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. In conclusion,
although
there are several advantages of starting learning an international
language
at primary
school
rather
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that
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learn at secondary
school
, there
also
are some drawbacks to
this
. If students learn a foreign
language
fast as they can, it is better to keep put knowledge to them to improve their skills and have
well-paid
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career
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careers

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in the future.
Therefore
, I believe that there
are
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is

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more good than
bad
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a bad
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point
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of
this
.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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