The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world schools should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subject such as information technology

The rationale of schooling is to develop
children
for modern global schools should prioritize useful
subject
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such
as
information
technology
and do away with art and
music
.I agree that
information
technology
is very crucial
as
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in the current century,as it is going to be a major requirement in any job opportunity in the world.
Firstly
,
children
who got the opportunity to study
information
technology
from early stages in school will be proficient in
this
skill as it is part of everyday life.
Technology
is a powerful tool to teach
children
as with
fast changing
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world ,
thus
the skill will be very useful for their future jobs.
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,
a
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research done by the Kenyatta university
information
technology
department shows that 60% of jobs advertisement require
information
technology
experience.
Therefore
,with
information
technology
as
priority
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subject in school, will be an added advantage to
children
.
Secondly
,
children
should be engaged in all subjects because they have different
interest
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since some can perform
excellent
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in art and
music
that
information
technology
.
Additionally
,
information
technology
can
also
be a requirement in
music
and art as it is touching every aspect of daily activities.
For
example
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most entertainment joints are employing
information
technologist
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to facilitate
music
to
the
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large audience.For
this
reason,there should be no distinction on which subject is preferred than the other. In conclusion,despite
information
technologist trending,our current education system should not
complicated
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for not teaching some subjects in
argument
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that some are more beneficial
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that
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the
other
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as every child has
different
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interest.Let the
children
hit the book all required subjects
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