some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21.To what extent do you agree or disagree

The current tertiary institutions offer virtual learning to their students to allow
continuation
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the continuation

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of education.
To begin
with, mature adults are entitled to get married and raise a family because most of the engagement with education
are
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is

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done after 21 years;They are
also
able to get a
well paying
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well-paying

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job that would ensure economic stability;
subsequently
, taking care of the family demands will be efficient.
In
addition
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,addition

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marital problems are significantly reduced among mature couples comparatively.
For instance
,
Kenyatta
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a Kenyatta

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University study
that
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apply

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indicated that 80% of
population
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the population

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have stable families after attaining 21 years of
age
.
Therefore
, maturity is relevant in sustaining a stable family.
On the contrary
,
age
is just a number meaning after attaining
required
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the required

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age
of an adult anyone can get married because some people are orphaned at a tender
age
and would like to have a company to offer protection and care.
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example
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a young adult opting to get married because they do not have a stable source of income. In summary, adults should consider getting married after attaining 21 years of
age
in order to promote peaceful
family
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families

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and communities.
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