Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions.Some think this is fully justified while others think its unfair.Discuss both views and give opinion

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sports men

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and women take considerably greater amounts of money compared to other

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of individuals think that they are entitled to earn a lot of money,whereas others claim that they are taking a lot for the owners to realize.In my opinion, neither

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nor other occupations should earn peanut.

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of all, the benefits that accompany

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are enormous including: sponsorships, advertising and meritocracy just to mention a few.

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and women have a healthy lifestyle and physical fitness that enable them to reduce frequent hospital visits

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increasing the amount of time they get to work.

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, Kenya Prisons sponsor

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and women on merits and earn

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figures every month.

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is a lucrative career that

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to be recognized.

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, other occupations should

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take home

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amount of money because they are relevant to

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society too.

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, nurses and doctors who toil a midst pandemic to help the sick people.

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,just like any other

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they should get equally good pay. In conclusion, either

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careers or other occupations should not be belittled because they are both relevant to the current society today.Su

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

196 words

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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions.Some think this is fully justified while others think its unfair.Discuss both views and give opinion

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You and a couple of your colleagues would like to participate in a work-related seminar. Write a letter to your colleague who is the person in charge of the seminar and ask for: Detailed information regarding the dates Program schedule Enquire about cost and possible discounts for groups

Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?(

Government spend a lot of money on public celebrations such as national holidays and public festivals. Some people say that government spend too much on this and that they should use this money on other useful things. Do you agree or disagree ?

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all the shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?