Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions.Some think this is fully justified while others think its unfair.Discuss both views and give opinion

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and women take considerably greater amounts of money compared to other
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of individuals think that they are entitled to earn a lot of money,whereas others claim that they are taking a lot for the owners to realize.In my opinion, neither
sports
nor other occupations should earn peanut.
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of all, the benefits that accompany
sports
are enormous including: sponsorships, advertising and meritocracy just to mention a few.
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and women have a healthy lifestyle and physical fitness that enable them to reduce frequent hospital visits
thus
increasing the amount of time they get to work.
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, Kenya Prisons sponsor
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and women on merits and earn
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figures every month.
Thus
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is a lucrative career that
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to be recognized.
On the other hand
, other occupations should
also
take home
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amount of money because they are relevant to
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society too.
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, nurses and doctors who toil a midst pandemic to help the sick people.
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,just like any other
profession
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they should get equally good pay. In conclusion, either
sports
careers or other occupations should not be belittled because they are both relevant to the current society today.Su
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