Nowadays most information is available online, whereas in the past knowledge used to be stored in books and on paper. Do you think the advantages of this situation is outweigh its disadvantages ?

At present most
information
is available online, whereas in the past knowledge used to be stored in books and on paper. I am of the opinion that
this
has more merits than demerits which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. The
first
and foremost reason is, the accessibility of the
information
has escalated manifold. There are ample
of
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places
for instance
Wikipedia, Online articles, blogs, social media where there is millions of
information
is available to an individual at
required
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place and
time
.
In addition
to
this
, the process of finding
information
has declined
resulting
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in
time saving
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of an individual.According to
a
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research published by the New York
Times
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the online media are 60 % more reliable
then
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offline
medias
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media

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in collecting knowledge. Another clear reason is,knowledge gathered from numerous means is more trustworthy.As the records are authentic, a person can easily rely on them.
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, if an individual
want
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to gather data on
salt
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of a particular medicine, he can access the internet and collect it from trusted websites of hospitals,blogs by doctors or applications.
Moreover
, with these trustworthy
medias
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information
cannot be manipulated by any
of
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the
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individual
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.So the reliability of these resources
offer
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a person a verified result.
Moreover
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in
this
digital era,
information
available
from
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online has a greater
time
span
then
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the
information
recorded on
papers
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.All the pivotal records will be accessible in the future
also
so if anyone
need
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it
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in the near future they can easily access them.
Furthermore
, the data cannot be lost from online media as it has the probability to be lost on paper. To conclude
although
there are disadvantages of the subject as
information
can be easily copied, and the data available from these resources
consists
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of old figures,advantages like easily assessable, authentic,
time saving
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are
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far more in comparison.
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