Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is the biggest source of pollution and waste. Others think that industries are the ones causing pollution. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is an indisputable claim that pollutants from vehicles are the biggest source of deterioration of the climate. while according to others
industries
are the crux of
such
environmental damages.
Although
cars
,undoubtedly cause detrimental effects on the urban environment. Industrialism is way bigger above all.
Emission
Correct article usage
The emission

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of gases for
cars
,bikes,trucks and many other vehicles are creating dangerous situations in cities. Gases like Nitrogen and sulphur emit during
combustion
Correct article usage
the combustion

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of fuel are the main component is the depletion of
ozone
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the ozone

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layer. As an alternative to
this
, scientists come up with an idea to create an engine
which
Correct pronoun usage
that

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runs on electricity.
For instance
,Electric car sales are booming in the market as compared to
cars
which run on fuel.
As a result
, deterioration in the environment is controlled and the quality of air index is improved.
In addition
to that, the government is promoting the use of public transport to overcome the
pollution
from
cars
.
On the other hand
, development in the
industries
are
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is

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advanced due to several reasons. As the consumers in the market are growing,
industries
of various varieties and categories of products are set up. People require various choices in their products.
As a result
, to
fulfill
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fulfil

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the ambitions of the masses new
industries
,construction creates various types of deterioration which eventually bring long term consequences to the ecosystem. To
further
illustrate
this
point, Amazon recently set up their largest
second
office in India as consumerism is in great demand today which eventually creates long term
pollution
. Observing the aforementioned threats both
cars
and
industries
are culprits increasing the
pollution
. But
pollution
from
industries
create
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creates

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severe impacts on habitat as various controls are not imposed on them.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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