Better driver education for better driving habits is more effective than heavier punishments for driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#driver #education #habits #punishments #offenses

There is no doubt in my mind that

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topic came at the right time and it shouldn't just be an essay where

people

debate

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, it should be an important part of society where drivers are better educated than punished. I will personal agree and

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put my resources in advocating that better

driver

education

for better living driving habits is more effective than heavier punishment for driving

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. I could still remember what happened to me two months ago when I was travelling to another state for an important family meeting, the

driver

was more concerned about making money

instead

of his

safety

, the

safety

of his passengers and the

safety

of other road users.

This

impression, clearly showed that he will be glad to pay heavier punishment for his

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instead

safety

because he lacked

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driver

education

. If

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(s) is/are asked to pay heavily for their

offenses

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or punished heavily, the

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is that the mindset

is not change

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and the offender might repeat

same

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action but with better

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, the mindset, the orientation

are all modify

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to see the consequence of your negative actions and the outcome of your positive decisions. We have many

people

on the roads who have little or no knowledge about driving and punishing

such

people

will not yield a long time positive

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due to the fact that they might not know all the "do and don't" of driving. Whereas if

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same

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people

have better driving

education

, there is a higher probability that things will go

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positive direction.

Education

has always being a tool for

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of the mind and society.

Thus

, educating or better

driver

education

will surely yield more results than heavier punishment.

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