Some people claim that the government should provide free health care. Others think that the government will not provide the most innovative methods of treatment and it's better to invest those funds in education and culture. What is your opinion?

It is undeniable that the healthcare sector is the crucial sector for government to manage and many advocates that
this
should be available at no
cost
and few feel that the authority will fail to provide the latest medical services. I would argue that
the
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medical responsibility is the fundamental right of everyone and should be made available at no
cost
. The main reason why I support
the
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free medical
care
is, everyone in society is not financially capable to take
care
of their health issues timely.
Consequently
, which may invite serious fitness concerns. When medical
care
is available at no
cost
it will be approachable to everyone
then
all health issues will be dealt
timely
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,
resulting
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a strong and healthy nation.
Secondly
, the government collects taxes from the public and
this
money should be spent on the welfare of the society at large and making medical services accessible to people at no
cost
is the best way to do
this
.
On the other hand
, those who are of the view that making medical facilities free will be of no or less use of taxpayers money,
they
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may think because of corruption and other unethical practices. and the same funds can be invested in education or cultural activities
instead
. Considering the many reasons in favour of free medical
care
. Authority should take the responsibility for better education, cultural
activites
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. To conclude ,
although
many urge the government to put money
in
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education and cultural activities,
i
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strongly affirm that the medical facilities should be available and accessible to everybody at no
cost
.

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