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Nowadays, sending children to boarding school(either in other countries or in their own countries) is becoming increasingly popular. Why is it?. Is it a positive or negative development? (edited)

#children #school #countries #development
LIVING APART FROM FAMILY IS BECOMING COMMON FOR ACQUIRING A SCHOOL EDUCATION.
HOWEVER
, THERE ARE PLENTY OF REASONS BEHIND
THIS
 SITUATION IN
THIS
 MODERN EPOCH. I THINK
THIS
 IS POSITIVE DEVELOPMENT FOR YOUNGSTERS. THESE POINTS WILL BE ELABORATED ON IN THE SUBSEQUENT PARAGRAPHS. NOWADAYS MOST OF THE PEOPLE ARE WORKING THEY DO NOT HAVE TIME
FOR TAKING
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 CARE OF THEIR CHILDREN AND STUDY.
AS A CONSEQUENCE
 THEY PREFER TO SEND THEIR CHILDREN TO
HOSTEL
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THE HOSTEL
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 faculty. IT IS PUBLISHED IN THE NEWSPAPER ARTICLE ABOUT 70% OF THE STUDENTS
OF
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JOINED BOARDING
institute
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INSTITUTE
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 AFTER COMPLETING THEIR PRIMARY STUDY. STUDY IN BOARDING
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 PROVIDE DIFFERENT TYPES OF RECREATIONAL ACTIVITIES TO LEARNERS WHICH WILL BE AIDFUL FOR MAKING A SUCCESSFUL FUTURE.
NEVERTHELESS
, STAYING IN HOSTAL IS POSITIVE DEVELOPMENT FOR STUDENTS. THEY BECOME INDEPENDENT BECAUSE THEY MANAGE THEIR BASIC THINGS WITHOUT
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 OF THEIR PARENTS
SUCH
 AS WESTERN CHILDREN .
FURTHERMORE
, JUVENILES GET KNOWLEDGE ABOUT DIFFERENT CULTURES,
LANGUAGES
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AND LANGUAGES
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, WHICH CAN BE HELPFUL IN FUTURE OR GETTING WORK IN OTHER PROVINCES OF THE WORLD. IF PEOPLE DO NOT GO OUTSIDE OF THEIR HOMETOWN
THEN
 THEY HAVE LIMITED OPPORTUNITIES FOR GETTING SUCCESS IN THEIR LIFE.
TO CONCLUDE
,
ALTHOUGH
 BOARDING academy HELP TO BECOME INDEPENDENT TO TEENAGERS THEY ARE MULTILINGUAL.
ACCORDING TO
 MY WITH THE HELP OF MORE INFORMATION YOUNG ONES HAVE MORE WAYS FOR SUCCESSFUL CAREER GROWTH.
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The logical structure of the essay is somewhat clear, but the introduction and conclusion need improvement. The ideas are not well-connected, and the essay lacks coherence in presenting the arguments. The use of cohesive devices and organization of ideas need enhancement.

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